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Okay, your about to find out that i'm very horrible at writing stories... But, I have fun writing them Here goes...
Oh and, Zandalai is a hunter, Zulu is her pet(king bangalash) and the baby raptor is a leaping hatchling

"You have to be very quiet," Whispered Zandalai from her hiding spot behind a large boulder. Zulu pounced at a nearby raptor. "Zulu no! Bad boy!" Zulu brought the raptor carcas back to Zandalai and dropped it to the ground. "Remember Zulu, quiet footsteps, like this!" Zandalai tip-toed over to the raptor nest, and Zulu followed. She picked up one of the eggs and inspected it. "Looks good, lets go!" As the two started to run off, they heard a large screeching noise from behind them. As Zandalai turned around she found herself pinned to the ground by a raptor. In her struggle, she dropped the egg, and Zulu pounced on the raptor. When the raptor was dead, Zandalai hurried over to the egg, she picked it up and wiped the dirt off. "hmm... seems like the egg's not gonna hatch properly..." She said as she looked down at Zulu. "I'll keep it with me... Just incase" She got out her bag and gently placed the egg inside. A few minutes later, Zandalai felt something moving in her bag! "The egg!" she shouted. She quickly took her bag off and looked inside. In the bag, there was a baby raptor! Instinctevly, Zulu tried to attack it, but Zandalai pushed him away. She checked to make sure the Raptor wasn't injured and put him on the ground. The baby raptor jumped on Zulu's back and began nibbling on his pelt. Zulu shook him off, and growled at him. The whole day, the baby raptor attacked Zulu...

Omigosh I know, horrible right? But, when I think of something else, i'll add on!

It was great. As a tip tough, making new lines every once in a while makes the text a bit easier to read.

I liked it tough, any continuation coming up?

Ty for the suggestion, and I might add on

Zandalai stroked the large brown bear's fur as she dismounted. "good boy" she said softly. She opened the stable door to be greeted by Zulu. She gave him a quick pat on the head, and they began to walk off. "Zee?" said Zulu in a quiet voice. "Yes?" she replied. "Are you going to have that stupid raptor out again?" he growled. "Pookie is NOT stupid! He's just a baby!" Zandalai snapped. A growl came from deep in Zulu's throat.

"Get this thing off of me!" Zulu growled, pawing at the young raptor." You know you could actually use that leash you bought..." Zandalai rummaged through her bag and pulled out a red leash. She got out a collar and slipped it around the raptors neck. The leash was worn, and it had been chewed on quite a bit."Hey Zee!" said a low voice from behind them. "huh?" Zandalai turned around to see a large tauren standing in front of her.

To be continued...